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Writing Banging Queries

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It’s a week off for me. Not intentionally, but the projects were finished early and others that were supposed to show up didn’t, so I get some much-needed time to myself. This house is cleaner than it’s been in years, and today is the day the tent, tables, etc. arrive for the stepson’s rehearsal dinner.

Because I’m currently idle, I’ve been sending out some queries in hopes of getting something to fill in. This month will undoubtedly be my worst earnings month in years. I took much of last week off, so that’s no great surprise.

But the queries are getting some notice, at least. I have one editor I’m trying to work details out with. I proposed something, but he’s looking for a different angle. We’ll see. But we’re at least talking about it. It’s an editor I don’t work with often, so I’m eager to please him.

Queries are a great place to start looking for business when you’re new to freelance writing. While magazine work shouldn’t be your only staple, it’s solid work that pays well if you can get the right idea in front of the right editor. That part isn’t hard — just do your homework. Notice what they print, what ads they run, what they don’t print (almost more important than what the do), etc. Once you figure out what they’re after and you have your idea, write that query.

That’s where I see a good deal of problems, though. We’re writers, yet when it comes to writing content that can get us more work, we falter. We don’t like talking about ourselves, selling ourselves, or even approaching “busy” people. We’re busy too, but we’re not exactly focusing on that part, are we?

So here’s how I write queries that get attention. Feel free to use any of these methods or adapt them to fit who you are:

K.I.S.S. Ah yes, the old “keep it simple, stupid” method. It should be part of every query, and it starts with defining your topic and narrowing it down. Don’t pitch an article on “Obamacare” — that’s way too broad a topic. Instead, pitch an article on how Obamacare affects teenagers whose parents aren’t insured. Or how about an article on five ways Obamacare can make more sense than your employer’s health plan?

Start with your lede. Your lede is the first lines of your article — your hook to get readers to continue. Don’t hold back on this one. Your first audience is the editor, and if you can entice them to want to learn more, you’ll get the assignment. Make it strong. For example, “You pay $80 a paycheck for your employer-sponsored health care, and your deductibles are high. Could the ACA be a better option?”

Mention experts. I include three potential interview sources. I don’t necessarily contact them before getting the assignment, but rather I put their names out there (and their titles/affiliations) to show I’m prepared to go forward with good interview subjects.

Test your focus. Part of your query letter should be the questions you intend to ask. I include this for one reason; if I can write five to seven questions, I know my focus is tight and I have a good topic. Also, these questions will help you later on when they become the basis of your subheads.

Keep it succinct. Notice I didn’t say short. Some topics may require a little more detail. Ideally, your query will fit on one page and be, at the most, four paragraphs — the lede, the proposal (include your experts and questions here), your experience and published clips, and your request to write the article. If you can’t present the idea in a few sentences, your focus is too broad. Go back and narrow it to one aspect.

Writers, what goes into your best queries?
Do you have a specific formula or template style you follow for each query?
What’s your query success rate?

8 responses to “Writing Banging Queries”

  1. KeriLynn Engel Avatar

    Perfect timing, Lori! This is what I'm working on now, and I'm hoping to get out several more queries before the end of the month. I tend to over-analyze and worry too much about getting it perfect, but I like your advice to just keep it simple. I just need to hit "send" and get them out there!

  2. Lori Widmer Avatar

    KeriLynn, it's the toughest thing at first because of exactly what you say — over-analysis. Just write it like you're talking to a reader or a friend.

    Then definitely hit Send. 🙂

  3. Paula Avatar

    I've always wondered by editors, of all people, write "lede" instead of "lead." Whatever the reason, I'm guessing it dates back centuries.

    All great points, Lori. I like to tell editors why their readers would/should be interested in the topic, too, just to show I know a bit about the intended audience.

    I follow the same format your do: teaser/lede; potential sources and questions the article would raise; and the me-me section.

    In the old days the me-me section would be a full paragraph plus at least three full clips. Today it's a couple URLS embedded between sentences. The first sentence offering some relevant info about my experience, and the last one directing them to view my LinkedIn page for more information and recommendations. I close by saying I'd love to discuss this idea with them soon.

    When researching markets, I prioritize which places to contact by listing info (easily found in Writers Market and other sources)including: frequency of publication; percent of freelance articles per issue (if it doesn't say, compare bylines with the masthead and you'll get a good idea); how far ahead they work; stated fee; terms of payment; rights purchased, etc.. You can save a lot of time eliminating markets that are less than 20% freelance, or at least save those for last.

  4. Anne Wayman Avatar

    Lori and Paula, I just looked up lede… first introduced in 1976! Figured it had to be much earlier than that.

    http://blog.bleacherreport.com/2013/05/22/at-the-risk-of-burying-the-lead-were-going-to-spell-it-lede/

    There was a time I thought I could make a living writing magazine articles… it happens, but not for many.

  5. Paula Avatar

    Precisely why I'm trying to expand into more corporate work, Anne. Time to put all this article writing experience to use in ghostwriting articles for higher pay!

  6. Ashley Avatar

    Paula, as a former newspaper person, I use "lede" too. For me, it is because it comes up in spell check as a misspelling — so that you catch it in case you have a blank space with filler text saying "lede here" or something. Also why I use "subhed" and things like that. There may be other explanations, but that's why I do it.

    Lori, great post! I've always been unsure what's the best way to go about presenting potential sources for the article. If you don't talk to them ahead of time, are you sure they'll be willing/have time to be interviewed for the article? Do you occasionally end up using different sources? Since you have an established niche, I'm sure you're already familiar with loads of sources. What would you suggest for those of us who aren't as established with sources?

  7. Lori Widmer Avatar

    Ashley, great questions. I don't worry about whether they'll be willing or have time. Instead, I phrase it this way: "I'll talk to experts such as…." That way, it's not a promise, but a suggestion that I can provide my own expert sources. And yes, I've ended up using different sources on occasion.

    It's never happened yet that an editor has expected me to follow through on exactly those experts I've named. It has happened that one or two editors have asked for specific sources instead or have assigned articles with their own sources in mind.

  8. Lori Widmer Avatar

    To your other question, if you don't have established sources (and plenty of times I don't, either), look to ProfNet or look at other articles involving similar or the same topics. There are people being quoted, which means they're willing to talk and someone knows them to have a particular expertise. Also, as you're researching, pay attention to associations and other organizations that cover that particular area. Plenty of expert sources in those places.

    When in doubt or at loose ends, ask the editor for some suggestions. Editors are there to help you get it right — I still ask editors for sources if I'm stuck.

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